"Hallo! Ich heiße Caitlin Nicole Feuer. Ich komme aus Bloomington, Illinois.
Bloomington liegt vielleicht zwei oder drei Stunde Südlich von Chicago. Ich
wohne bei meiner Mutter Debbi und meinen zwei Hunde Weaver und Teddy. Mein
Vater wohnt in Detroit, Michigan. Bei Drake Universität studiere ich Mzzagazinwissenschaft. Eines
Tages hoffe ich, dass ich bei Vogue schreiben werde. In meiner Freizeit lese
ich oder verbringe zeit am Computer. Wenn ich am Computer surfe, verbringe ich oft
bei Facebook. Mein Lieblingsbuch ist
„The Picture of Dorian Gray.“ Ich spiele kein Instrument aber ich hoffe,
dass ich eines Tages lerne ein Instrument spielen zu können. Jetzt bin ich
krank und ich habe nicht genug geschlafen. Ich habe Kopfschmerzen und Halsschmerzen.
Ich glaube, dass dieser Absatz lang genug für mein erstes Schreibeispiel ist."
My first writing sample was the better of the two. Because I was able to revise the writing twice and discussed the necessary changes with Dr. Cadd, I believe it was a better end product. Of course, this sample was much less challenging than the other writing sample and the projects. This is because I was talking about myself including words/phrases I have been using for years. However, I did try and challenge myself by having more complex sentence structures and alternating my verbs. I tried to stay away from using haben/sein time after time, which can often be difficult. This was a little rough, because I did not use my German at all during the summer so I had to dig deep into my brain to remember some vocabulary and grammar rules. This writing sample demonstrates the platform on which my German is built. I certainly know that I have a far way to go before I can write German perfectly, but I do believe this is an almost flawless sample. With the help of Dr. Cadd I was able to fix the mistakes that I made that aren't standardly taught in class. I remember being excited to finally be able to use the verb studieren. I distinctly remember my high school German teacher explaining the difference between lernen and studieren. It was one of the first assignments I completed in college and was very happy about it. In terms of my future writings, I will continue to attempt to use alternative words/phrases/sentence structures. Generally, I think I write German pretty well and am up to the level I should be. One critical aspect of my writing that I need to work on is definitely my self-editing. It's very easy to skim over writing and dismiss possible mistakes. I need to remember to read my writing out loud and make sure that I'm not simply translating in my head from English to German. As I begin to enter an advanced level of German, I also need to pay special attention to rules that are outside of the norm and adverbial phrases.